From: Philip Jacobs (phjacobs) Sent: Tuesday, February 05, 2013 4:50 PM To: oneM2M_TP@LIST.ONEM2M.ORG Subject: oneM2M-Drafting-Rules-20130105.doc Follow Up Flag: Follow up Flag Status: Flagged Hi Gerry, Thanks for this, just a few suggestions and questions :-) 2.1 Could we add the info required under both "informative reference" and "normative reference" instead of noting under "normative reference clause" ? 2.2 Add INF 3.4 Can we specify UK English? (not American English) 4.3.1 Gorking -> Working 4.3.5, 4.3.6.4 Could we simplify "the present document" -> "this document"? 4.3.6.1 we should specify the form of reference to be used in the body text I.e. Will it be [1] or [ETSI-1] or the full text of the reference or something else? Should this be made clear in 4.3.6.7 ? 4.3.7 Could we add the source of the definition using a reference? E.g. 3.1.2 application [b-ITU-T Y.101]: A structured set of capabilities, which provide value-added functionality supported by one or more services. 5.1.6 re: "do not use cross-referencing option", do we mean that hyperlinks to internal references should not be used? 5.17 could we also support Word 2011 ? I may have missed it, I did not see guidance regarding: * the use of a clause having only title without body text * Figures as embedded objects or as pictures The only area I have trouble with is 4.2.1, the use of exception numbering e.g. 4a, and VOID make the deliverable less readable for the sake of avoiding re-numbering. I would prefer to re-number. Best Regards Phil